Please Don't Make Fun!!
I wasn't in the mood to write a poem. Also its CONTEMPORARY so ...
Drained, despondent, depressed,
Searching, searching, racking my brain!
What is it?
I know it!
Somewhere, it has to be in here somewhere!
What!
Why! Why can’t I find it?
I know it!
I know I know it!
So close!
Almost!
Its, its, its…
Maybe if I…
No!
Noo!
That won’t work. Nothing works!
What about,
Perhaps,
Could it be,
Dismal!
Yes that’s it! Dismal!
Drained, despondent, depressed, dismal.
That’s the first line, yes, dismal.
Now for the second line of the poem!
3 comments:
Haha, i thought your poem was very amusing. I like the way you built up the suspense, enthralling the reader, then adding a suprise ending. This can be described as an epiphany, a sudden twist changing the course of the poem. This poem is somewhat refreshing after reading so many poems surrounding serious themes. Personally, I am a fan of contemporary poetry as it allows poets to express themselves freely without limitations. This poem follows no structure, rhyme scheme, or meter, and I think this is what added to my interest in it. Many might critisize it under those aspects, yet, I believe, that poetry should be a means of expressing oneself freely. This poem takes advantage of that, so I really enjoyed it. Overall, I loved your suprise ending; your poem was quite the comic relief. :D
Great Job!!
Rana! I really enjoyed reading ur poem! I loved your wrting style its very original! The ending was very suprising. Poetry is all about expressing ones feeling and you have successfully reached that..you just threw out some words that express your emotions without paying particular attention to the poetic devices..and thats whats poetry all about..being FREE!!Great JOB!
As said above, your poem is obviously a comtemporary one. Refreshingly entertaining and different than any of the other poems posted. I thinks it's interesting how you've taken your "Drained, despondent, depressed" mood and created a fun read. Usually the writer tries to drag the reader into that same mood but you've used it as if to cheer up. If this poem truly reflects your state of mind then I'm quite surprised. You always seem so happy! This isn't really necessary but you forgot the question marks after the "What" and "Why". Or was that intentional? (contemporary writing tries to break as many rules as possible). You've pushed the enveloppe. Bravo!
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