Time
Time flows carrying oblivious bystanders
Time rushes by with deceptive ease
She is impatient and unforgiving
She never lingers and always leaves
Time has no conscience, she feels no guilt
She is sometimes vindictive and always cold
She dangles strings of hope then pulls them away
Time tempts the young and tortures the old.
Those who are able to learn from her wisdom
Possess the greatest power of all
If they can befriend man's ultimate enemy
They can conquer any obstacle, big or small
Time is always watching, lurking around the corner
And only the prudent learn to embrace her.
3 comments:
I liked your sonnet! The overall meaning is clear(its obvious from the title that the sonnet is about TIME, maybe u shoud've chosen another title to make it a bit obscure). Another thing,
you didnt follow Shakespear's rhyme scheme abab cdcd efef gg yours was abcb defe ghih jj!!
but other than that i really enjoyed reading it!good job!:D
"Time is always watching". This line at the end gives the poem a very spooky mood! ou are completely right that time isalways around us and that is why your sonnt is so awesome...you give it a very realistic atmosphere, which is really nice.
A very interesting thin is that you refered to time as "she", why? Any particular reason?
Wow!! Great sonnet!! Very strong and poratrayes the message well. I must say I love how you refered to time as "she", very interesting, and, of course, restores the natural order of life. :-D
Time is analyzed from many perspectives, all of which seem true, "time rushes", "never lingers and always leaves", "has no consience, she feels no guilt", "vindictive", "cold", "tempts the young and tortures the old", and so on. It was, honestly, a very interesting read. You followed the sonnet structure properly. Just the ryhme scheme seems to falter away from Shakespearean convention at the begginning.
Great job overall!! :D
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